Writing feedback: Joy

Received some very helpful feedback on a story today:

We thought ‘Joy’ was a good short piece, somewhere between flash fiction and a short story. That said, there was rather too much telling and not enough showing. The fairy tale air gave it a very ethereal quality, but it writing needs to be less descriptive in order to leave more to the imagination.

It’s always interesting how different people see writing – I liked the fairy-tale element (which was designed to be more told, because of the slightly distanced nature of fairy-tales, which they picked up on) that this story had, and had actually pared down the description a lot in earlier drafts.

I’ll go back and have a re-read, and have a think about the description, maybe change the balance between description and not.

What do you think?