Whole-class feedback and triadic structures in English lessons

My GCSE groups are studying The Lord of the Flies – I like doing the same texts with them as it eases up my planning a little bit. One is slightly ahead of the other and wrote an essay on the significance of Simon in the novel. I wanted a feedback lesson that would give them the opportunity to improve their own work but which would also get them to read each other’s, as I think they often have so much to gain from this sharing. I read all their essays, and wrote a grade on the bottom – a …

Writing feedback: Joy

Received some very helpful feedback on a story today: We thought ‘Joy’ was a good short piece, somewhere between flash fiction and a short story. That said, there was rather too much telling and not enough showing. The fairy tale air gave it a very ethereal quality, but it writing needs to be less descriptive in order to leave more to the imagination. It’s always interesting how different people see writing – I liked the fairy-tale element (which was designed to be more told, because of the slightly distanced nature of fairy-tales, which they picked up on) that this story …